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Kiruchi Storyboard by TheDragonofDoom

:icondravedragonheart:
So my first critique forgive me if this isn't too brilliant so you'll have to bare with me

So I'll start with the vision visually it had me confused at first but after reading your description this sequence made more sense to me and from beginning to end this looks like it can make a really nice sequence there is a little something that I believe could make this better, between panels 3 and 4 I think the should be something slotted in between them showing that there is a broken bridge ahead just so there isn't a sudden jump so the viewer knows that there is something potentially deadly in front and behind of the running guy.

This sequence is very original it's your own idea with your own creations stalking a guy so to me it's a very original idea and that's great!

The camera techniques used here are very well done from what I can see, the sequence as it goes on builds up suspense and just as he thought he was safe he isn't and apart from that one small kink in between panels 3 and 4 it's pretty much perfect.

This very well done and I would say this gives a nice impact to the viewer throughout the sequence with a little tweaking this will turn out to be a very nice sequence.

Hope this helps you out I've done a little cut sequence design with in my course and done a couple of projects on this so I'm hoping my experience will help out a little :)
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:iconthedragonofdoom:
TheDragonofDoom Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Student Artist
Thanks very much, and great critique! :D
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:icondravedragonheart:
DraveDragonheart Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
not a problem :) I've done a couple of these myself turns out I'm better at scripting than drawing them though :P still waiting for my Cut Sequence Design mark :S
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:iconthedragonofdoom:
TheDragonofDoom Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Student Artist
Yeah, I never really had interest in storyboarding, but I enjoyed myself. I might do more in the future! :D
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:icondravedragonheart:
DraveDragonheart Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
its not a bad thing to do especially when you manage to create an animatic out of the drawings adding sounds and such, can give your storyboards much more life, fun thing to do :P. You should it would give the species that you have there much more life :)
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